Brilliant! Genius! Please write more man! You're even getting better than me :)
Story starts out pretty smooth, I mean telling what someone is doing. Then, situations start right away, which makes the story intriguing. Most stories I read takes a long time before excitement starts, which makes me skip a lot of crap before it happens. Thank you my friend, I shall wait for the story to continue!
Twiddis
It's pretty interesting so far! I wonder what happened to her parents. I'm also interested to know how society functions with love being outlawed, as well as the reasons for it being outlawed in the first place.
Awesomeboy2000 (Updated )
Thank You!!! I'm going to be writing more soon, maybe I'll actually start getting involved with NG again!?
Oh, and her parents were taken to jail.
EDIT: OH MY GOD, TWIDDIS! YOU JUST REMINDED ME TO PUT A REASON FOR WHY IT WAS OUTLAWED LATER IN THE STORY, THANK YOU!!!!!